Hey readers/bloggers
Today I have been doing a story about a pirate that got stranded on an deserted island. I put how he got off the island using only the stuff that is on the island. There's not much to my story but here is my story.
I am a Year 6 ākonga/student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. My kaiko/teacher is Whaea Miki. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful, and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hey readers/bloggers
Today I have been doing a story about a pirate that got stranded on an deserted island. I put how he got off the island using only the stuff that is on the island. There's not much to my story but here is my story.
To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what I had to say
3. Something helpful - how have you connected with my learning? Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
Hi Yavnit. It’s great to see you writing during lockdown, well done. So what will happen to the pirate now? Surely he won’t just give up? Are you going to write some more? I look forward to seeing you on google meet tomorrow morning.
ReplyDeleteBula Vinaka Yavnit,
ReplyDeleteI like how busy you have been at home. It's great that you are sharing your work to your blog. I like your use of the simile in your story, well done! Captain Jack Sparrow must be a nice pirate to let the humans on his ship after they were shooting at him. I was also wondering if you were thinking of writing any more.
At least with the pirate being stranded again Yavnit,he's got experience from the last time it happened.Hopefully things will work out better for him.
ReplyDeleteAre there any materials on the island that they could use to build another ship?.Maybe they could salvage some from the boat that sunk.