I am a Year 6 ākonga/student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. My kaiko/teacher is Whaea Miki. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful, and helpful when you leave me a comment.
She said “Why don't you just lets some sun inside”. she said “ why don’t you stop playing and open the present that I got for you”. The boy said “for me”?. I think my updated sentence is
To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what I had to say
3. Something helpful - how have you connected with my learning? Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
Your story had a different ending to what I thought was going to happen Yavnit.Thank you for that.
ReplyDeleteWe used to have a dog that had 3 legs.He got hit by a car when he was little.People were unkind and used to call him Tripod.
Are you going to add to this and continue the story?.
Thanks for commenting on my blog ms cassidy. Um I don't know if I am continuing my writing.That Is so sad.
ReplyDeleteIt is sad but that's ok i like that you make title the boy plays with the dog outside and that's a great story yavnit the dog has three legs and the boy was mean at the dog he said GET LOST!!!! and drop the dog that was unkind for the boy being mean the dog but the boy was happy at the end of the video.
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting on my blog. I think you have been looking at my writing and reading it.
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